I truly have no words to describe this magnificent piece of literature here. The amount of detail that went into it, its just amazing how well it was all put together, the flow and pure emotion of what was happening. You clearly took the time to look up and incorporate many different aspects that were taken out of the full product, I believe anyone person who read this and is aware of the "issues" with the exist plot, they would feel much better.
No issues throughout the whole thing, maybe one or two things could be reworded to add even more emotion to it, but that's not truly needed, more than enough exist already. And its pace and conclusion were all beyond excellent. On this scale, its a 4.9/5, on mine...8/5